The Story: _5__ out of 5

Comments: List one thing you think the writer did well and AT LEAST one thing that needs improvement. Explain anything else that you noticed in giving your score.

Did good: captured my attention, and feel how she feels.

Need to improved: explain how or why her father got criminal records.

Narrative Elements: __5_ out of 5

Comments: List one thing you think the writer did well and AT LEAST one thing that needs improvement. Explain anything else that you noticed in giving your score.

Did well: explains very well how hard things were for her.

Need to improve:

Structure: _5__ out of 5

Comments: List one thing you think the writer did well and AT LEAST one thing that needs improvement. Explain anything else that you noticed in giving your score.

Did good: the time was good, how things were before, during, and after.